Today in class, I reviewed and revised my paper. I went through and weeded out the unnecessary sentences and details throughout my paper. I took into account all of the feedback I have been provided with. Seeing this allowed me to understand my weaker areas in writing. I struggle with creating a strong thesis, as well as the usage of second person. I need to provide more in depth, researched facts in the final draft. After creating a stronger thesis, I plan to reflect each paragraph back to the thesis, stating my argument. After a lot of editing, I hope to come out with a stronger and more effective essay.
Weasel words are a safe way for ad creators to positively reinforce their product. These words seem to reassure buyers that the product is the best quality available. Words such as “help”, “improve”, and “virtually” allow customers to feel comfortable using the product, although it may not necessarily be an accurate statement. An example of weasel words being put into action in an everyday ad would be the Cascade dish detergent advertisement I have attached below. The company claims it makes dishes “virtually spotless”. “Virtually” is a perfect weasel word because it appeals to customers because everyone wants their dishes to look clean. It is safe because although it makes them virtually clean, it does not necessarily mean they are actually clean.
Alignment- The ad contains many examples of alignment. The containers of Lysol are strategically placed to advertise the product and allow customers to become familiar with the product. They made the bacteria big so readers and customers can grow aware of the problem at hand and still directly relate them to the Lysol.
Proximity- The creator of this ad broke up different points being made with the help of borders. The header is primarily there to state a fact and capture readers attention. This is because it presents readers with a problem considering it is the first thing people read. Customers and readers will have to continue reading in order to solve the problem that concerns many parents. Contrast-This ad does not seem to have a particular color scheme. They do use cooler colors to make the young girl appear innocent and almost as though she is a victim of these bacteria. Repetition- The product of Lysol is being repeated on both containers as well as down in the bottom left. Having repetition allows customers to become familiar with the name and look of the product. I have had countless struggles with my writing throughout the semester. My biggest struggles have been writing an outline, as well as breaking down my writing into different times. I have a tendency to type an entire paper in one sitting, although I know that is an unsuccessful way to go about it. My writing becomes duller and less specific the longer the essay. I need to work on this. With my outlining, I have always had a difficult time with this. I never seem to follow the original outlining as well as I’d hoped. An area that has helped me a lot though my writing process is first drafts. Having multiple drafts that are to be edited prior to my final draft allows me to see which opinions and angles to take and pursue in my writing. Even if I simply send a draft to my mom or a friend, it always helps to have other opinions on my papers before fully completing it.
Original:
The special effects used during this film is unlike anything people have seen before at this point in filmmaking. From realistic explosions, to high quality filming of chases and fights, these effects transported viewers from the movie theater seats into the chill inducing city of Gotham. The realistic effects cause the audience to leave the theater feeling as though they actually rode along with the characters throughout the film. After SIEL: The special effects used during this film is unlike anything people have seen before at this point in filmmaking. From realistic explosions, to high quality filming of chases and fights, these effects transported viewers from the movie theater seats into the chill inducing city of Gotham. As the joker blew up the building towards the end of the film, the authenticity was so chilling that it deceived the audience into believing they were actually in the city of Gotham. The realistic effects cause the audience to leave the theater feeling as though they actually rode along with the Batman and The Joker throughout the film. |
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October 2015
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